This essay’s peer review was highly beneficial for me since I was having trouble finding my words in this essay. Based on the peer edits I received I need to improve my thesis and its clarity, as well as the wording. I also need to improve the connections of my points to the thesis, and possibly rework the order of paragraphs to improve the flow of my paragraphs. I also need to work on creating more depth with my ideas, by elaborating on ideas mentioned and expanding the explanations of my quotes. I think my biggest challenge is going to be expanding on my ideas, just because some of them are harder to explain especially if I want to include text to self and text to world connections. The corrections given by both Sarah and Professor Emerson also supported these corrections, as well as a few grammatical corrections. I appreciate all corrections since they improve the overall flow of the essay as well as improve the paper overall.