For my peer review, I edited Sam’s essay. My revisions were resolved since she turned in the essay, but this was the final comment I left on her essay:
Katies Note: Overall really good!! Your topics follow throughout the paper and aren’t confusing. A thing that could be improved is the consistency with explanations of quotes, some are gone in depth and others aren’t really explained very much. The paper flows well but I think if you work on some of the transitional phrases introducing paragraphs, quotes, or in paragraphs in general then the flow would be even better. You had many good points within your essay! Some of them would work to strengthen your intro paragraph if they were mentioned in it. You also had a lot of strong quotes that help with the flow of the essay. Your conclusion is very strong as well! Overall your essay is really strong.